By Rosa
I have blue eyes/curley hair and one sister. My sisters name is Hollie. I have a puppy called Pepper. I am called Rosa. My mum is called Nikcy and my dad is Called Dean. My friends are called Emily/Hayley/Lillee and Laura.
Me and my family go travelling to a lot of places to see my other family members.
My puppy's breed is a snozer croosed betren a tybeetinterea. We got her from Rotaroa. My friend Emily
loves animals. She has 2 ginny pigs there names are flufey and cinnamon and she has 2 cats called Bella and Stalla. Stalla and Balla fight a lot. Me and Emily make houses for the ginney pigs. Lillee has a ipad with lots of games on it.
My sister does hip hop. She goes to a lot of competitions for hip hop. I use to do hip hop but I did not enjoy it that much. So thats my live.
I found this story in my emails Rosa. Sorry, it should have been posted last week!
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There is a lot of excellent writing in this post Rosa. Grammar, spelling (mostly), and punctuation are all fairly accurate and I like the paragraphs. Commas need to be used for lists (eg, "...Emily, Hayley, Lillee and Laura").
ReplyDeleteIt is great to see you choosing one main idea to write about in detail at a time. The details add interest for the reader and paint a clear picture for better understanding.
Teach
It is great that you travel so much Rosa.
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