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Excuse me young lady but this poem is brilliant! Each verse paints a picture for the reader. Some of the verses that contradict each other ("Never ending day." and "Day of rest.") are easily fixed by adding a word ("Day of rest tomorrow") or moving them to the other stanza (paragraph).
The rhythm ('meter') of the poem is very sophisticated. Great job Latia!
Excuse me young lady but this poem is brilliant! Each verse paints a picture for the reader. Some of the verses that contradict each other ("Never ending day." and "Day of rest.") are easily fixed by adding a word ("Day of rest tomorrow") or moving them to the other stanza (paragraph).
ReplyDeleteThe rhythm ('meter') of the poem is very sophisticated. Great job Latia!
Teach
I love the poem Latia. I especially like the bit where you add the finishing touch with "Mum picking you up.". That is very touching.
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