A Really Smart Police Man

By Nikayla


On the 2nd of April we had an awesome day at ciyle (cycle) safty. a relly smart Pileace man cam in to teach us a bit about it.


on the first day he walked in with his nice flash uniform on and his big black boots and said "hi gis (guys) will be telling you a bit about the new road rules." We were stoked to have him here over the last hour he had finaly finished and said to bring our bikes on Munday and we will have a corce set up for you.


I arived at School and every one said "did you bring your bike" I was sad to say no but at last I had a rein my mum had to wark (work). "Oh thats ok they say Heres some cool bikes there that you cod (could) boro" thats great I say with a little smile Rrrrriiiinnnngggg goes the bell its time to come in and do cycle safety yeay we all say we hed out there and get a green bike that has the word. the first day was pritty cool with all the things that has been thowin (thrown) at me, not relly.


Day two was a bit better first I had brung my bike thats one thing the seckond thing was that there was a relly cool and awesome obstickle corce it was a bit hard at the start so I got a relly smile bike I mean a relly smal (small) bike. It was a bit eazere (easier) But It Just goat evere (easier) and ezerer (easier) as I did It each time. I fayiled 2 times because It (I) did not know the corce. with sweat driping (dripping) off my face I politely asked marcus to Por water on my hed but insted he tiped (tipped) my hole water bottle lon my hed but at lest it felt good and cold.


Day 3 the last Day of cicle Safty I had to make shour (sure) that the last day was the best Day and gess what It was. we had a inter sekenthin (intersection) and on our bikes we had to pouint to what Dreshin (direction) I wanted to go in. we had about 8 terns. After we had done that we had the same obstikel corce but it was set up difrint.

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This is a writing test. Students were given 45 minutes to plan and draft a story recounting the best, or worst, thing that happened to them during Cycle Safety. The stories are assessed as 'draft writing' for how well they have been written for 'readers' understanding' and 'readers' interest'.

Readers' Understanding:

1. Grammar (making sense).
2. Accurate spelling.
3. Accurate punctuation
4. Background information (making sense).

Readers' Interest:

1. Writes about one main idea in detail at a time.
2. Uses descriptive language.
3. Uses language features (expressive language).
4. Uses personal comments.

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