Room 11 we did Cycle Safety with constple qulin. We had to do an activitiy there was a jump I fill off it four times. It was really srow (sore) when I faill of my bike. When we finished I didn't want to go. There was an obstacle coss I fill of it two times.
When I was doing the obstacle coss I didn't put my feet down ones. There was a searow (seesaw) we had to go on it hreat (hurt) my bottom. I had a fanstictic time even when I fill off. it did hreat but I still enjoyed it.
"When I fill off my bike it was really inbrasing"! people were laghting at me. I filt hreat on my leg but I didn't crie I stayed tuff and didn't give up I gave it another go. As I fill off I got squashed by my bike it really hreat.
I fill of my bike five times it really really hreat. I stayed tuff and gave it another go.
xxxxxxx
This is a writing test. Students were given 45 minutes to plan and draft a story recounting the best, or worst, thing that happened to them during Cycle Safety. The stories are assessed as 'draft writing' for how well they have been written for 'readers' understanding' and 'readers' interest'.
Readers' Understanding:
- Grammar (making sense).
- Accurate spelling.
- Accurate punctuation
- Background information (making sense).
- Writes about one main idea in detail at a time.
- Uses descriptive language.
- Uses language features (expressive language).
- Uses personal comments.
Understanding:
ReplyDelete1. Grammar - mostly accurate but disjointed.
2. 5/6 words are spelt correctly.
3. Capitals/fullstops mostly accurate.
4. Who/what included.
Interest:
1. Main idea + 6 details (some general).
2. Descriptive language - 1 example.
3. Expressive language - 1 example.
4. Personal comments - 3 exampless.
Teach
I am impressed with your very determined attitude Talia.
ReplyDelete