All Shook Up

By Emily


Cycle Safety is to help wen you are Bikeing on the road. ConstBel galen (Constable Garland) Puts out All Sorts of opstkills (obstacles) out. You have to get thow (through) no (on) Your Bike. ConstBel ganlen maded a road to tech (teach) the class the road rels (rules). I wasint Sure wich way to go wen I fist went on it. But then I got the hang of i't. my favote (favourite) opstkill was at the ramp I loved raceing over it I All So Liked the Logs. there were a line of Logs and You had to ride over them fastily (fast or quickly) no Your Bike. wen You rid over them it rily saked (shook) You up. Oh sh-sh shot that was All I coid (could) Say before I smaket (smacked) to the grond wen I rid them!


I no (know) I'm not to good at Bikeing now But I will Be Some Day.

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This is a writing test. Students were given 45 minutes to plan and draft a story recounting the best, or worst, thing that happened to them during Cycle Safety. The stories are assessed as 'draft writing' for how well they have been written for 'readers' understanding' and 'readers' interest'.

Readers' Understanding:

1. Grammar (making sense).
2. Accurate spelling.
3. Accurate punctuation
4. Background information (making sense).

Readers' Interest:

1. Writes about one main idea in detail at a time.
2. Uses descriptive language.
3. Uses language features (expressive language).
4. Uses personal comments.

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