The Bike Was Too Big

By Regan

Too big! it was The cycle safety bikes There were me/Room11. it was at the front filld. Tuesday. for cycle safety.
When I went on the cors I got my bike and hoped on itand road it I got on the corve (curve) and falld (fell) it was graet (a great) full. I liked the seasor (seesaw). The big wooden trake (track) too. I liked The wooding (wooden) plank. and I allso the speed bump. It was a good stargto no (start on?). nervas and sceard.

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This is a writing test. Students were given 45 minutes to plan and draft a story recounting the best, or worst, thing that happened to them during Cycle Safety. The stories are assessed as 'draft writing' for how well they have been written for 'readers' understanding' and 'readers' interest'.

Readers' Understanding:

1. Grammar (making sense).
2. Accurate spelling.
3. Accurate punctuation
4. Background information (making sense).

Readers' Interest:

1. Writes about one main idea in detail at a time.
2. Uses descriptive language.
3. Uses language features (expressive language).
4. Uses personal comments.

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