Woho I've got nothing to worrie about. We were doing it at the cycle safty course at the front field. But sadly it was a windy day.
On the skinny course I was getting ready and I said to my self I'm to good and then...BOOM!!! BOOM!!! My front tyer goes first then my back tyer. Oh no I fell of I was going to fast.
Mr Clark said remember to slow down.
I got back up and did my best.
I was feeling pretty good.
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This is a writing test. Students were given 45 minutes to plan and draft a story recounting the best, or worst, thing that happened to them during Cycle Safety. The stories are assessed as 'draft writing' for how well they have been written for 'readers' understanding' and 'readers' interest'.
Readers' Understanding:
- Grammar (making sense).
- Accurate spelling.
- Accurate punctuation
- Background information (making sense).
- Writes about one main idea in detail at a time.
- Uses descriptive language.
- Uses language features (expressive language).
- Uses personal comments.
Your best use of language yet Will!
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1. Too much info left out ("...doing it"?).
2. 15/16 words spelt correctly.
3. Beginning capitals/full stops/exclamation
marks used correctly.
4. What/where included. Who is implied.
Interest:
1. Main idea + 5 details (disjointed).
2. Descriptive language - 2 examples.
3. Expressive language - 3 examples.
4. Personal comments - 2 examples.
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I'm glad you got back up and did the cycle course again Will.
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