Falling Off Hurts!

By Talia

Room 11 we did Cycle Safety with constple qulin. We had to do an activitiy there was a jump I fill off it four times. It was really srow (sore) when I faill of my bike. When we finished I didn't want to go. There was an obstacle coss I fill of it two times.

When I was doing the obstacle coss I didn't put my feet down ones. There was a searow (seesaw) we had to go on it hreat (hurt) my bottom. I had a fanstictic time even when I fill off. it did hreat but I still enjoyed it.

"When I fill off my bike it was really inbrasing"! people were laghting at me. I filt hreat on my leg but I didn't crie I stayed tuff and didn't give up I gave it another go. As I fill off I got squashed by my bike it really hreat.

I fill of my bike five times it really really hreat. I stayed tuff and gave it another go.

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This is a writing test. Students were given 45 minutes to plan and draft a story recounting the best, or worst, thing that happened to them during Cycle Safety. The stories are assessed as 'draft writing' for how well they have been written for 'readers' understanding' and 'readers' interest'.

Readers' Understanding:

1. Grammar (making sense).
2. Accurate spelling.
3. Accurate punctuation
4. Background information (making sense).

Readers' Interest:

1. Writes about one main idea in detail at a time.
2. Uses descriptive language.
3. Uses language features (expressive language).
4. Uses personal comments.

Weet-Bix Tryathalon ( by Talia )

I was nervous when I went to tahununi for the weet-bix triathlon. When my colour group started I was really nervous. Where's my bike there it is I was really fast on my bike because I practise for at less a week. I was really tired when I had finish my second lap. When I was running I was really puffed yah I am near the end there is water at the end. When I had finished my run I go a medal. I couldn't see my Mum and Dad. There they are I am puffed I said mum said I bet you are. Were do I go now mum over there OK see you soon. I hope I get a dink bottle and a good photo with my medal. There were spot prizes and Stoke School  was in the drow to a thirty dollars. We got a photo with weet-bix man he give me a hi five it was cool next year I am going to do it again.

ICT With Mr, Tompson

 When Mr, Thompson cames in the morning when we do ict with Mr, Thompson . When we start we go on the on this blog. We have i-pads at school we use them for our work we go on this blog. We also use the camerae we take photos and then we down load  the photos that we take on the camerae. When we are on this blog we finish or start a new post. Mr, Thompson he wants to be able to read fifty post bye the end of this term we are really trying our best to do it.

By Talia

Fun Time With Talia!

Short hair,short & I have glasses. Thats me! My name is Talia and I have three sisters.I love siwmming in my pool at home and at school.

I fight a lot with my sisters. My old sister she always wins its not fair! I always lose.We all have to go to our rooms and tidy it up. When we fight I srceam so does my second olds sister she also is my second best sister
her name is Leilani.

Siwmming is my best sport it is awesome. I siwm at home and at school I have a coach his name is Andy. Time I told you about my pool well I have a bowlup dolphin.I can siwm a whole length of my pool and of the school too. Sometimes I wonder if I will ever siwm in a triyatholon competing agasiant perfeshional?