

This is Room 11's blog (class of 2012). 11Online/2012 gives us a chance to write for an actual audience (reality writing). The main goal is to improve our writing over the year. We will continue to proof read, edit and improve our posts even after they have been posted. If you want to read more about who we are, our blog goals, and our school, check out our blog page 'About Us'.
I love your post Georgia.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds really interesting.
By Shimya
Your writing is always interesting Geogia. I'd like you to work on paragraphing. This will highlight all the great things you do when you write.
ReplyDeletePossible Writing Plan (outline)
1. Intro - Friends
Lots!
Different friends/different things
Some play morning soccer (where?)
2. Different friends/different things
Nikayla/twins/Olivia/Ciarna/Anna/Julia
(the details about what you do together)
3. Morning soccer
(details)
4. Conclusion
(repeat your main message/personal comment)
You already know what to write about Georgia. This just helps you to organise your writing in a way that makes it easy for the reader to follow.
Teach
Excellent. If you follow the outline Mr Goad sets you. Your posts will be brilliant! Very easy to read Georgia.
ReplyDeleteok thank you
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