29 Mar 2012

My Cats

My name is Emily and Im going to talk to you about my cats I have 2 cats called stalla and bella stalla is 1 and bella is 3 I got bella for my birthday and stalla for my brothers birthday stalla like to sleep with me bella likes to sleep with my brother I rilley want to have a pet day at my school so I can bring them.  by Emily
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  1. Anonymous29 March 2012 at 12:35

    I like your post I also like cats to.

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  2. Eleven On-Line29 March 2012 at 22:16

    a pet day could be a good idea for a house day Emily. Your writing is very accurate (making sense, spelling and punctuation) as usual.

    I'd like to see you try a different way of starting your writing for a change. How about starting with an attention grabbing sentence (eg, 'Cats are cute, cuddly and carefree!)?

    Personal comments are good for adding interest too (eg, 'Bella was the best birthday present ever!').

    Teach

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