I like Ice cream and chocolate and banana cake. mm lots or banana cake yummy yummy cake any way. I also like lollies I have saved the best for last fried rise. I have two brothers in my family one Mum and one Dad I have 1000 Cousins in my family. I am the only girl in the my house.
by Shardanee
Great accuracy Shardanee! Now we need to work on getting you to introduce what you are going to write about and then write about each main idea in detail. For example:
ReplyDeleteThis story is all about me. Something a lot of people dont know is that I love food. They don't know how huge my family either!
Then you can write about the food you love in detail. Then about your huge family.
Teach
Great work Shardanee, good for me to read because i know Kaipara. You can tell me more about him!
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