The hoop pine tree is one of Stoke School's best place's. We all so have a lot of trip's like going to Rabbit island but we havint gone yet because it is Polluted becauseof a big flad. Stoke School is allmost the best school in the world. Im Hayley and there is a girl helping me her name is Rosa. We got a new tiger turf all of the stoke school kid's like it. At Stoke School we can make a lot of opportunity's if you do that you might get a stoke school rist band me and Rosa haven't got one yet.
By Hayley and Rosa.
Kia ora!
ReplyDeleteThe title needs capital letters doesn't it? Your first name and your last name both start with capitals don't they?
Well done you two. I told you I would be checking on your work online. You did choose interesting topics to write about. Why was there pollution at Rabbit Island?
ReplyDeletegood work girls just needs editing.
ReplyDeleteGreat start girls.
ReplyDeleteInteresting ideas for the reader is always a good idea. More details about each idea (the Rabbit Island trips) would add even more interest.
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